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For those of you attending the San Francisco Writers Conference this weekend, Thursday-Sunday (Feb 12-15), I look forward to seeing you there! For those of you not attending, I hope you’ll consider coming in 2016. It’s a great experience.

But I don’t want to talk about the conference; my last few posts have droned on and on about the SFWC 2015. The main point I’ve been trying to make is: Attend writers’ conferences. Duh, right? But you’d be surprised how many writers don’t go to these. Usually the excuse is money or time. Save up, use a credit card, apply for the scholarships, or volunteer. Just go.

Anyway, what I do want to talk about on this post is the craft of writing. Usually I talk on these posts, in general, about literary agents, conferences, submitting work, editing, etc. But today I want to talk briefly about the craft of our art form called writing.

Now, there is this very real cultural divide in the writing industry between “literary” writing and “commercial” writing. As literary agent and author Donald Maass points to, the key to success with readers is to walk that fence perfectly. Meaning the point is to writing with great depth and meaning in mind, while creating a solid plot that includes tension and conflict and all the other good things a novel should possess.

David Corbett, award-winning Bay Area author and writing conference speaker (The Mercy of the Night, April 2015) always talks about one of the key ingredients of a novel plot being “secrets.” In his book, The Art of Character, Corbett reflects that secrets are key in a novel, creating mystery and inherent tension and conflict. This tension pushes the story forward. Why would two characters agree on something when they could just as easily argue? As readers, we identify more and empathize more with fighting. And aren’t we by nature secretive? Think about your family? How many secrets lay therein?

Going back to Donald Maass’s point, the idea therefore is to straddle the line between deep meaning and metaphor and a killer plot. And that is, indeed, a hard line to tow. If you focus too much on plot (Stephen King, Lee Child, Robert Dugoni, John Grisham) you might be branded as a “hack” or overly commercial and concerned only with making money. On the flip side, if you write like Sylvia Plath or Michael Chabon or Junot Diaz, you might be heralded as a solely “literary” writer.

Maass suggests breaking out of that tired, restricted mold and writing what he calls “high impact” fiction. By “high impact” he means aiming for the middle ground between the two. In doing so, he argues, you are essentially appealing to both sides, and that, he claims, makes a literary agent in New York City (or wherever) tingle between their groin. Try to write the most “high impact” book that you can by effectively bridging the gap between literary and commercial writing. In essence, create three-dimensional, intriguing characters that get put in high risk (emotional, psychological, literal) dangerous situations, and have to figure their way out somehow. On the other side of the same coin, give those characters meaning and breadth and depth that creates not only an emotional response in the reader but forces the reader to think deeply about life, freedom, love, art, society, death, etc.

And there’s also the literal crafting of the sentences in a novel or creative nonfiction book. Commercial authors are always saying you should write very short, clipped, Hemingway-like sentences, in order to succeed in the industry. Now, why do they say that? They say that because so often inexperienced writers will read too many classic American books from the 20th century and think: I will write these lengthy, overdone, over-the-top sentences that are a paragraph long and have great weight and depth and “meaning.” The truth is, though, that these sentences are windy and blown-out. The meaning gets lost in trying to understand the freaking thing.

Don’t do the above. Don’t go the windy, overblown route. However, don’t, either—if you’re trying to write successful, high impact prose—write super short, clipped prose sentences. Make a deal to stay in the middle. Play with rhythm and cadence. Speak your prose out loud. Try making two or three sentences short and clipped and then making the third or fourth sentence longer and more well-rounded. Make that last sentence feel like it’s completing the previous two or three. Make sense? Here’s an example.

“John was grumpy. He hated it when Sue acted this way. He felt unhappy. And then again, when he truly thought deeply about his predicament, the reality was that he felt scared and lonely, abjectly sitting around on his chair like he was a child, effectively staring at the wall that had become his life.”

Ok, not the greatest writing or sentence in terms of “meaning,” and it’s more telling than showing, right? But you can feel the cadence here, the rhythm; it works. In a writing/craft sense, this paragraph flows quite nicely. You don’t have to mechanically follow this suggestion literally every paragraph in your book, but it is a general rule of thumb. Hopefully, if you write often enough and take yourself seriously as a writer, you have some kind of functional intuitive writing vision and awareness going on as well. Follow that feeling. It usually won’t lead you too far astray.

And lastly I’ll say this: Don’t be afraid to pump out a shitty first draft. Seriously. The biggest hindrance for new writers is the truth that they won’t allow themselves the chance to fall down on a first draft. Let yourself write the damn thing; stop self critiquing and self editing and going back in and changing, altering, amending. Just write it and have fun. Then put it aside for 6-8 weeks, focus on other things, and come back to it with fresh, objective eyes. That’s when the rewriting and editing comes in. For you, the writer, not for me, the book editor. You won’t be ready for me, and shouldn’t use my editing services, until you’ve gone through several drafts and have had objective, serious, and truthful readers read it and give their honest opinion.

Until then, keep writing and keep rocking.

I’ll see you at the SFWC 2015 this Friday.

Michael Mohr

*** If you’d like me to edit your book please email me with your project: michaelmohreditor@gmail.com

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I want to talk about agents and query letters on this post. Most of you who read this blog, likely, don’t have agents. I don’t. I have been working towards one for the past few years at this point and life, relationships, rewriting, and rejections have all gotten in the way.

It’s a tough road to finding an agent, no doubt about that. The majority of people who write actually never will find or land an agent, and that’s the cold, hard truth. I have received much feedback, via both professional editors like me—but who’ve been in the business longer and can see my book with fresh, objective eyes—and agents, and I have a newly rewritten draft of my adult suspense book, that I’ve been working on for 3 years now.

There are a few things you can do right off the bat, as a writer, that will save yourself a lot of time and potential rejection. Go to Amazon, or your local bookstore if they carry this type of book, and buy Chuck Sambuchino’s “Guide to Literary Agents, 2015.” He comes up with a new, updated version every year, and the 2015 one is already out. Buy it. In this helpful, informative resource guide, you’ll find a list of agents who are currently accepting various manuscripts. You’ll see their desires and dreams, how to submit to them, through what medium to submit, and a little bio and contact page. In addition, there is info on writing query letters, synopses, and all other kinds of things you’ll need to know in order to submit.

You can also find Chuck online. Click here for that info. He has a new and updated New Agent Listing online, through Writer’s Digest. And if you’re still wondering at this point, and you haven’t clicked on the link or typed his name into Google, Chuck Sambuchino is a freelance book editor, an author, and a writer for Writer’s Digest. He commonly appears at writers’ conferences and is a speaker at these events, hosting informative classes, etc. He is very knowledgeable about agents and the world of writing in general. I had him edit my first 50 pages recently and he’s worth the money. Give him a try, if you don’t go with me as your book editor J

Query letters. These are the most common and simple letters to write, and yet, they are a modern-day phenomenon and writers today, in general, still struggle with crafting them. I get it. They’re tough. For those of you who don’t know what they are: Query letters are a very short introduction to you, your book, and your credentials and platform/plan for your commercial success as an author.

Basically, a query letter is your first handshake with an agent. It’s the first thing they’ll read, before they even glance at the manuscript. Actually, the truth is 90% or more of the time, unless the agent is brand spanking new, you’re actually submitting to the agent’s assistant. I would know; I used to be one. I worked at a firm in Tiburon, in the Bay Area, where I live.

So remember, the ms might be fantastic—make sure you have several critique beta readers first, and hire a pro book editor like me or Chuck Sambuchino—but if the query letter is weak, then kiss that chance goodbye. An agent is insanely busy. Think of them as literary nurses; they work 24/7. When they go home on weekends, that’s when they do most of their heavy reading, or while on “vacation.” The competition is high: Hundreds of thousands of other “writers” are trying to get through the same tiny gate. And agents are the gatekeepers, no doubt. So heed my advice. Spend whatever time necessary to make sure you hone that query.

Here are some basic rules to follow:

• Keep it to 250 words max if possible. A little over, if absolutely necessary, is okay. But shoot for 250.

• Keep the letter very simple, concise, to-the-point. Read it to a smart, discerning friend. Does it make sense? Is it clear, simple, understandable, enticing, intriguing? Would they want to read the book?

• Think of the query in three sections: 1) The book logistics: What is the title and word-count; what is the genre; is it contemporary or older; is it similar to other commercially successful books already on the market? (Some agents like this; some don’t.) 2) The book’s plot: This is your chance to tell a 1-2 (try for 1) paragraph synopsis of the plot, demonstrating your tone, voice, and style. Keep it very brief, to-the-point, and concise. Have a little fun with it, but stay professional. 3) About the author: Who are you? Have you been published before? Any accolades, awards, short stories published? Have you been involved with a notorious writing school or workshop, etc? If you’ve never been published before, don’t mention that; just mention anything related to writing or the book itself. This is also the area to mention social media: Are you active and promoting your writing through Facebook, Twitter, Pinterest, Google-Plus, etc? Do you have a writer’s platform? Who is your audience? How will you market your book? (Try to make the whole query 3 solid paragraphs if possible. IF you must, 4 paragraphs is okay. Always 1 page or less.)

• Keep it professional. Always address the agent as Mr. or Mrs. or Ms. Never “Dear Agent.” If in doubt, address them by their full name. Follow Chuck’s examples online or in his guide to properly format the greeting and letter in general.

• Make sure you add in all your relevant contact info: Name, address, phone number, and email. Most agents will use email initially and then, if they decide to sign you, will move to making phone calls.

Remember, the whole point of a query letter is to entice the agent to want to see more, to see the book. It’s frustrating that we have to do this in order to even get an agent to look at the book (and they still might reject it), but it’s what we have to do in today’s competitive market. Do yourself a favor: Don’t worry about other writers and whether or not they are landing an agent; just focus on your book, your query letter, and your synopsis. Synopses are a whole other thing for another blog post.

For now, get on those query letters. And write the best damn book you possibly can. Leave the rest up to the fates.

Michael Mohr

Michael Mohr is a freelance book editor and writer. To contact Michael for potential book editing services, please visit the “Editing Services” page on this website, and email Michael at: michaelmohreditor@gmail.com. He handles adult and YA fiction in most areas except science fiction. He is currently taking on clients.



I want to talk about discipline and patience in this industry (writing), and how both pay high dividends. Recently I finished yet another round of rewriting for my current novel, which I’ve been working on for roughly 3 years now. This is a big deal. Those of you who’ve been paying attention to my progress therein know that I sent the book out to agents a few months back and, though I received some requests for more material, all ended in rejections. This, of course, is very common and is part of the package of “being a writer.”

At first, I’ll admit, it was tough to face the rejection and move forward. When so many people tell you, “Unfortunately…” you start to get down about things. But, not long after these rejections occurred, and I stopped submitting to agents, two things happened, and both changed my perspective. The first is that I found out I’m getting two nonfiction stories published in “aaduna” magazine, which has a pretty huge following. That is exciting. What better validation than to have some of your work, even in a small press, published, after having gone through the [emotional] wringer a la rejections from agents while seeking representation for your book?

Seeking representation for your book, whether nonfiction or fiction, is a really big deal. It means that you’re feeling fairly certain that you’ve achieved a particular level of writing craft and storytelling ability, and that, furthermore, you feel ready at this given time and place and point in your career, to show the world what that craft and story is. Even simply being at that spot as a writer is a big deal. But then, of course, there is the not-so-subtle reality that follows: It is freaking tough to get an agent in the 2015 writing world. Real tough.

But it’s possible, and I know, personally, that I am going to get my book out there. It’s just a matter of time; waiting. And of having discipline and patience.

The second thing that happened after the rejections, besides publication from a small press for those two stories, is that I decided, finally, to hire an editor. Actually, I hired two editors; one a younger female and one an older male. I wanted two different perspectives. This turned out to be a blessing, and it gave me more to think about in terms of my own book editing clients, seeing as I am a freelance book editor. (If you want to read an excellent, powerful memoir, read my client Christian Picciolini’s book: Romantic Violence: Memoirs of an American Skinhead, about his experience falling into and then out of the first wave of white power skinheads in America in the late 80s. He redeems himself, don’t worry. You won’t regret the read.)

One editor—the male one—basically liked the book (well, the first 50 pages, which I hired him to look at). He had some more technical comments, which I did find mildly helpful, but he didn’t really criticize the book in any way that I could hook into and say, “Ah-ha! That’s the problem!” He praised the pages, saying he had enjoyed the read, was invested in the characters, and wanted to read more and do the full edit.

The woman, however, struck literary gold. She pissed me off, which is always a good thing. She struck a vein and was right on the money. She said my characters were flat, that there was “no emotion,” that the voice was weak, that there was too much “info dumping,” that I was “telling and not showing,” and that I needed to use more action and dialogue and less summary. In short, she bummed me out. Big time.

But it wasn’t long, as is my process, before I came around to her side of thinking. She was right. No doubt about it. So there was only one thing to be done. I waited for a bit, got busy with other stuff, took a deep breath, and dove back in. After all was said and done, I had rewritten the entire book for the 2nd time, believe it or not. And I think this version is MUCH stronger. I added emotion to the characters. I had them talk and argue more, creating relevant tension. I had the characters DOING things more instead of telling the reader and summarizing. I allowed the reader to EXPERIENCE the story as the characters lived it, instead of constantly trying to directly fill the reader in, which insults their intelligence and isn’t useful. In short, the characters began to bloom and become more interesting, and the plot thickened. I asked a published writer friend to read it and they started the first few chapters, immediately commenting on how much stronger it was.

So, in essence, this has been a learning experience for me. I know that I do the best when I let go and stop getting neurotic about my writing or my need to control the outcomes (will an agent like it?), and to simply do the next right thing, take the simple action required to write the best book I can write. I still have a ways to go in terms of tightening and editing, cutting, adding, etc, but I can see that this version is much stronger. It’s only because I have cultivated the hard discipline over the years to be able to write daily, while also working on clients’ books at the same time (not literally), that I have arrived at this attitude. That’s a tough balancing act. Then again, the rejection no doubt takes its toll. But I think, at the end of the day, it’s all about letting go and being patient; cultivating a regular routine. Some of you are in weekly writing workshops; that’s great. Others get up at 5 A.M. to pump out that 2,000 words per day. Some only write three times per week, but they do it every week without fail.

Keep at it. I never thought I’d ever get anything published. I have about 15/16 stories published now. The novel is coming soon, I can feel it. First I have to nail an agent. I know how they work; I used to work for one. My time will come. So will yours. Don’t give up. Unite and fight. Keep going, past the rejections.

We’ll do it together, if only in spirit. I hope to see you all at the San Francisco Writers Conference, Feb 12-15 at the Mark Hopkins Hotel.

Write on.

Michael Mohr

(If you’re interested in my editing, please email me: michaelmohreditor@gmail.com)


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